12/17/2006

Dew on last rose


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winter morning -
a few dewdrops on
my last rose






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the next morning :



first snow -
my last rose now
covered in white






This is the Camellia in snow !

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3 comments:

Anonymous said...

I like this haiku, Gabi.
It is succinct, objective, makes good use of choshi (tone and rhythm). yugen (depth and mystery), and makoto (truth and beauty).

You write in a style respective of
the Japanese who gave us this medium.

robert wilson
http://groups.yahoo.com/group/cherrypoetryclub/message/29396

Anonymous said...

冬薔薇の季語がせんじつ近所の句会に
登場しました。

とても良い感じですね。

中村 作雄

Rita said...

Stunning haiku, as usual, Gabi.
I think that the key word is : (last). It is the pivot of this perfect haiku. I admire the simplicity in which you convey great ideas.