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winter morning -
a few dewdrops on
my last rose
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the next morning :
my last rose now
covered in white
This is the Camellia in snow !
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3 comments:
I like this haiku, Gabi.
It is succinct, objective, makes good use of choshi (tone and rhythm). yugen (depth and mystery), and makoto (truth and beauty).
You write in a style respective of
the Japanese who gave us this medium.
robert wilson
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冬薔薇の季語がせんじつ近所の句会に
登場しました。
とても良い感じですね。
中村 作雄
Stunning haiku, as usual, Gabi.
I think that the key word is : (last). It is the pivot of this perfect haiku. I admire the simplicity in which you convey great ideas.
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